Give me tips for my essay?

This is boring.. It is innundated with facts and figures and little story.. I think the only person who would be interested in this is a major football fanatic. If this is your essay, put in more story, more of a reason for me to read it. Otherwise, you are just filling out a stat sheet, not building an essay. When you are writing an essay, consider your audience and try to make it interesting for THEM to read, not interesting for you to write.